Can you tell me what you think of my poem (honest opinions)?
It is very good, very heartfelt…which is what fuels all great writers. And no, it doesn’t “have to rhyme”….seriously now, that’s just crazy! Half of the poetry that I myself write doesn’t rhyme, and I just so happen to be a published poet from a junior poet competition I won when I was 17. Seriously Saz, hasn’t a “relative of William Blake” ever heard of iambic pentameter, a type of poetry that rarely rhymes. Another example, haiku is an ancient form of Chinese poetry, and it almost never rhymes! Were they not poets? I think I have made my point, but I veered off topic in the process, sorry. Back to the poem at hand, I don’t think you need to change anything. I would never tell someone that they had to alter the words that came from their heart. They are your words, and no one can make them any better than they are right now. You have a gift, so share and use it as you see fit, my friend. Feel free to contact me if you have any other poetry you’d like me to read for you, I’d be happy to read something that beautiful anytime!